- The Wolf of Britannia
Some of you may remembered I submitted my manuscript THE WOLF OF BRITANNIA to my book doctor/editor for review. I just
received a four page evaluation (down from twenty-three pages last time) along with a partially line edit copy of my manuscript.
The biggest issues she found that need to be fixed are dialogue and individual thoughts. The following is a partial from the
"Voice: You know exactly what you want everyone to say, but I still think you need to work
on writing dialogue and thoughts (see the next section for more on thoughts) in each character's unique voice. So really go
through your lines of dialogue and add some "oomph" to reflect each character's personality. Almost everyone sounds
the same, so now that you know what you want to say, and have done so much work on the story, go back and tweak that dialogue
so that each character is distinctive. Most of your characters' voices show promise in certain scenes, but their dialogue
is not consistent in reflecting each individual's personality (and in most cases, you must still decide what that personality
is). You don't have to do an overhaul of all of your dialogue--your characters are saying what you need them to say to advance
the story--but you should re-craft the lines so that they are stronger for your characters..."
length this is what she had to say: "Length: I think that the length of the story (160,000 words) is doable for a historical
novel. I definitely don't think that you can divide this into two parts, or should. If you need to get it down, it would require
a line edit, as I don't see any huge chunks that can be taken out without sacrificing the story. I suppose you could completely
cut out Porcius (he is the Roman adversary and only other POV I use other than Caratacus) if needed to get it down to size
for cost reasons or because your publisher wants it shorter.
Caratacus is the main character and the story could technically
be told solely from his POV (point of view)."
In all honesty to delete Porcius's POV would reduce the story's
effectiveness as far I am concern.
I contacted Lawrence
Knorr, publisher of Sunbury Press, and The Sign of the Eagle. He said they would publish
it as a duology and release the two volumes close together. It will take me at least six months to complete the rewrite.
Barnes & Noble Scheduling Update
I am currently lining up several
book signings at Barnes & Noble stores in Washington State for The Sign of the Eagle.
They are as follows: Bellevue, Kennewick, Olympia, Tukwila, Federal Way (Sept. 28th) and Spokane Valley (Oct. 5th). Most likely
the schedule will be finalized by the end of July. I will post the dates on the book signing page at that time. Also, I am
lining up signings at the Hastings Entertainment stores as well. So far Moscow, Idaho, Spokane - South Hill, and Spokane
Valley, Washington are on board. I expect to have Boise, Idaho, and Walla Walla, Washington, on on the list too. Am looking
to see if it would be feasible to add Hastings in Helena, Montana, to complete the list.
Bay Area Barnes & Noble Signing (?)
I contacted the Community Relations Manager at Barnes & Noble
-Stevens Creek, San Jose, California. She is going to schedule me for a book signing at their store. She will let me know
the specific date when she finalizes her schedule. There are currently three B&N stores in San Jose with Stevens Creek
store the biggest of the trio. I will tie this into a visit with my son, Chris, and his family who live in the San Jose area.
The Broken Lance
Because I am concentrating my efforts in the rewrite of The Wolf of Britannia, I
have suspended the rewrite of The Broken Lance. However, since I have rewritten fifty-two
chapters but have only read thirty-four to the Spokane Novelist Group, I will continue reading the chapters at our bi-weekly
meetings. I will still make any corrections they suggest. Usually, I can make them in a couple of hours. Right now, I have
enough to read to the group for the next ten months (longer since I will miss several meetings because I will be conducting
Notes on the Ancient World
I have added another encore
article, Apartment Living in Ancient Rome, Part I, to the Notes on the Ancient Page. If you missed the first time around, now is your time to catch up. I think you will
enjoy it. It should make you appreciate how much better are today's living conditions.
That's all for now. Until next time, Salve et Vale!
Hail and farewell!